Abel rock (Endy persona user) (Ready for grading)

Abel rock
Come on! Stop being such a prude and let's have some fun!

The Biography

Birth Name: Abel rock
Aliases: The oni
Gender: Male
Age: 16
Birth Day: December 12th
Arcana The fool
Place of Residence: Little tokyo
Evoker: Mental Shackles
Academy Semester: second year
Class: (We'll fill this in once you're approved. This will be your class in school)

Sorority: N/A

Part/Full Time Job: N/A

Appearance: Abel stands at 5,7 and weighs 145 pounds, abel has short blonde hair and bright blue eyes. His skin is extremely pale and he gets sunburned
Pretty easily. He mostly wears tanktops and shorts, but in colder weather he'll wear longer clothing. He also has quite the bubble butt.

Alternate Appearance: The mask that appears when he summons his persona is a pure white oni mask, with 2 5 inch horns on the sides. His hair color changes from blonde to red, and if for some reason he took off his mask, you whould see that his eye has also turned red. The rest of his outfit is just a black hoodie with black gloves

Personality: Abel is a huge jokester he's always messing around and he doesn't take things too seriously. That's not to say he can't be serious, however
if he is forced into a serious conversation he'll be very uncomfortable. He tires his best to stay happy and upbeat so that he doesn't bring other people down. But if you do catch him when his feeling down, you will find that he is much more than he seems. He is also a huge nerd who love anime, manga, and video games.

The Potential

Strengths: (Anything your character is skilled in, such as Martial Arts/ Drawing/ etc? You are allowed a maximum of five strengths and a minimum of three.)

—Strength Name: Allure
—Description: There's something about abel that make people want to please him. Doubles the amount of charisma points abel gains.

—Strength Name: Pretty boy
—Description: Abel is a very pretty young boy. Charsima starts off at rank 2.

—Strength Name: Fearless
—Description: It takes a lot to get under his skin. Abel has extra 10% chance to resist the fear.

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((A floating Strength is a strength you've gained inRP. For example, if you were on a Kendo team for some time, you'd naturally know Kendo which is where this strength would come in. However, be aware, it will not be as strong as any of your actual strengths and is a small plus)

—Floating Strength Name:
—Description:

Weaknesses: (You must have the same amount of weaknesses as strengths. These weaknesses pertain to you and not your Persona. IE: Physically Weaker, lack of attention span, etc.)

—Weakness Name: Slacker
—Description: Abel isn't one for studying he'd rather play his video games or watch anime. Havles intelligence point abel gains

—Weakness Name: Slow learner
—Description: Abel isn't dumb it just takes him a bit to fully grasp things. The 1st level up of intelligence doesn't count.

—Weakness Name: Down in the dumps
—Description: When something does get under abel's skin it really freaks him out. When successfully afflicted with fear the chance of him being immobilized and running away increases by 15%.
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((A floating weakness is one gained in RP. It could be a fear you inherited during RP, or an injury that hinders your character. Some can be temporary while others can be permanent.)

—Floating Weakness Name:
—Description:

Soul Bound Weapon: Brass knuckles

Weapon Name: Soul crusher
Weapon Description: A standard set of brass knuckles
Weapon Image:
Weapon Attack Type: Strike
Weapon Element: (Leave this blank. Only special weapons obtain an element behind its blows.)

Side-Arm Weapon: Revolver

Side-Arm Name: Soul buster
Side-Arm Description: A standard revolver with a red paint job.
Side-Arm Image:
Side-Arm Attack Type: Gun
Side-Arm Style: Revolver

The Background

History: Abel life started off pretty good he had loveing parents, a adorable little sister, and all the toys and games he could ask for. However that all changed when the divide took place. The demons managed to kill both his father and his sister, and they seriously injured his mother. After his mother healed she fell into a deep depression. She only leaves her room to go to work or get herself some food. Abel's mother also became very overprotective of him and she always wants to know where he is, what's he doing, and why he is doing it. Abel secretly blames himself for not begin able too protect his family, and he has vowed to become stronger so that something like that will never happen again.

Posts : 1468 Join date : 2018-09-15 Age : 34

I'm new to staff, so someone else may come behind me to amend, refute my statements here, but the only thing I'm really seeing as an issue is your fear weakness. For one thing, it should really say "When successfully afflicted with fear" or something, so everyone knows in what context you mean 'immobilized' and 'run away.' Also, that same weakness exceeds the maximum 15% addition for strengths and weaknesses.

I would request that you change your wording to instead say that the chance of these things "increases by 10%" or "increases by 15%" whichever you think fits your character better, instead of giving the total %. The reason for this is that there may be other things in effect that increase or decrease your chances of these things happening, and it will be easier for staff to apply all your benefits/penalties if it's listed this way.

Is this good?

Posts : 1468 Join date : 2018-09-15 Age : 34

Approved by me. I'll need someone else to double check though, so hang tight.

Thanks and will do.

Posts : 5994 Join date : 2013-10-06 Age : 30

Quote :: —Weakness Name: Down in the dumps
—Description: When something does get under abel's skin it really freaks him out. When successfully afflicted with fear the chance of him being immobilized or running away increases by 15%.

Change "or" to "and" for immobilized and running away.

That's all the change needed.

It is done.

Posts : 5994 Join date : 2013-10-06 Age : 30

approved

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