Alunsina - Mayu's Initial Persona (Completed)

Persona Name:Alunsina

Persona Type: Initial Persona

Persona's Arcana: Empress

Owner: Mayu Takanamiya

Persona Appearance: a persona with a human-like body.She had long golden brown hair,black eyes,and white skin tone.As for her attire, she had 2 conjoined sixteenth notes as her mask,A red shining gown that covers her from chest to foot with stars on it lowers parts.On the back of her gown, there is a crescent moon imprinted on it.Also, she wears white gloves.

(This is just a fictional story so don't believe in this story)
Persona Background: Alunsina's story begins at the beginning of time when the universe is just an endless void.There are 2 gods lives in that time and that was Alunsina and her husband "Tungkung Langit".Tungkung Langit is a very hardworking man,he leaves their house everyday just to create the universe.Alunsina wasn't allowed to get out because Tungkung Langit was very worried abotu her.So all she can do is, Stay in their home singing while combing her hair.One day, Alunsina can't take it anymore.So she creates an orb to spy on Tungkung Langit but in the end, Tungkung Langit discovered the orb and got angry Alunsina.As punishment, Tungkung Langit took away her powers.Alunsina cried and left Tungkung Langit by himself.After months passed since Alunsina left him, Tungkung Langit was getting lonely and blamed himself why Alunsina left.Due to his loneliness, Tungkung Langit returned home and he saw Alunsina's belongings.It was her comb and beads, So Tungkung Langit makes a star using her beads and the moon using her comb.He did thissi he can't lonely anymore because of his loss.Tungkung Langit is now a sad and lonely soul.It was said that the rain was his tears and the lightning was his voice calling for Alunsina.

Strengths: Ice and Lightning

Weaknesses: Wind and Fire

Passive Boosts: Healing Boosts - 15% more healing power
Persona Skill List:
Skill 1: Dia
Skill 2: Bufu
Skill 3: Zio
Skill 4:
Skill 5:
Skill 6:
Skill 7:
Skill 8:

Fusion Attack:

Fusion Attack Name: Destroying Melody
Persona Name: Alunsina
Type of Damage: Ice
Description: the persona and the user will sing a melody.As the melody finished, a big beam of ice will shot their enemies like the Circumpolarity move in Devil Survivor 2 but different.

Human Skill Name: Healing Melody
Persona Name: Alunsina
Tier: Tier 1
Cost: 4 SP
Type of Damage: None(Healing)
Description:the user will sing a Melody but a very short one.After the Melody ends, 15% HP and SP will be recovered
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The relevance between Mayu and Alunsina is that Alunsina shows the girly side of Mayu although that she is a Tomboy and her hobby of singing shows how Mayu likes music like Alunsina.

Okay, first. You listed two strengths and weaknesses. They have to be equal, therefore if you want to keep two strengths you have to add a second weakness as well.

Second the passive boost relates to the arcana, you can find it on the list. The actual boost is 15% to Ice skills rather than 5%. Or for Empress you could choose to have a 15% boost in healing skills. It's either the ice or that.

And lastly, your human skill...You have to keep in mind that it is only T1, therefore it can't do too much. Restoring all HP/SP and curing ailments won't do. A Tier 1 skill generally heals 30% of HP when used. Curing all ailments is a no no at that level. If you want both HP and SP then you could make it 15% HP and 15% SP, but that is the highest at such Tier. Or choose only one of the two and have it at 30%.If you really want some ailment removal, you can have either SP or HP at 15% and choose one type of ailment it can remove. As for the cost, 250 SP is way too high. You probably won't even have that much SP available ever. The cost would be only 4 SP for this kind of skill. Or 6 if you go with the ailment as well.

Also just a question, the Fusion attack is an AoE spell, right? Only making sure that I understand correctly, though I think I do, as Circumpolarity was AoE in DS2. Anyway, you say it might take a while, but an attack always takes only one post, unless specified differently for some reason. So that might not be necessary.

Safi wrote:

Okay, first. You listed two strengths and weaknesses. They have to be equal, therefore if you want to keep two strengths you have to add a second weakness as well.

Second the passive boost relates to the arcana, you can find it on the list. The actual boost is 15% to Ice skills rather than 5%. Or for Empress you could choose to have a 15% boost in healing skills. It's either the ice or that.

And lastly, your human skill...You have to keep in mind that it is only T1, therefore it can't do too much. Restoring all HP/SP and curing ailments won't do. A Tier 1 skill generally heals 30% of HP when used. Curing all ailments is a no no at that level. If you want both HP and SP then you could make it 15% HP and 15% SP, but that is the highest at such Tier. Or choose only one of the two and have it at 30%.If you really want some ailment removal, you can have either SP or HP at 15% and choose one type of ailment it can remove. As for the cost, 250 SP is way too high. You probably won't even have that much SP available ever. The cost would be only 4 SP for this kind of skill. Or 6 if you go with the ailment as well.

Also just a question, the Fusion attack is an AoE spell, right? Only making sure that I understand correctly, though I think I do, as Circumpolarity was AoE in DS2. Anyway, you say it might take a while, but an attack always takes only one post, unless specified differently for some reason. So that might not be necessary.

Edited and I hope it is better now

What's AoE? I don't even know that the spell was coincidentally named in that AoE spell so it's a no but Circumpolarity in DS2 doesn't take a while

Did some research I know what is AoE now on second thought it is an AoE attack

I didn't mean the time it takes in relation to the Circumpolarity but to the battle system here, just saying.

Anyhow, you can have the cost for your Human skill at 4 SP, it doesn't have to be 8. And just for the aesthetics...a human skill is something a character can use without needing its Persona's aid, as in normal world for example you cannot summon it without special means. So, technically it would be only your character singing it if, as a Persona isn't truly related to that sort of skill.

Other than that it looks good. I'll check back later and approve when/if you change those little things. If you really want to keep that cost fine, but you can have it lower than that which is always better : D

Ok I edited now the fusion attack is sang by both persona and user and the human skill is only sang by the user

Alrighty then, approved ~