Avicebron, Grand Magus

Persona Name: Avicebron

Persona Type: Tainted Persona

Persona's Arcana: Magus

Owner: Taiki Hayama

Persona Background: Solomon ibn Gabirol, also known as Avicebron, was a eleventh-century poet and philosopher. He was born in Malaga, Spain, and he was the father of an entire thaumaturgical system, Kabbalah, and one of the starting points of the process leading up to the European Renaissance through bringing Greco-Arabic and Jewish lore and enlightenment to the cultural circles of Europe.

He published over a hundred poems, as well as works of biblical exegesis, philosophy, ethics and satire. One source credits Ibn Gabirol with creating a golem, possibly female, for household chores.

Ibn Gabirol is well known in the history of philosophy for the doctrine that all things, including soul and intellect, are composed of matter and form (“Universal Hylomorphism”), and for his emphasis on Divine Will. Of his personality, Moses Ibn Ezra wrote: "his irascible temperament dominated his intellect, nor could he rein the demon that was within himself. It came easily to him to lampoon the great, with salvo upon salvo of mockery and sarcasm". He has been described summarily as "a social misfit".

Strengths: Earth

Weaknesses: Darkness

Passive Boosts: All mutated Skills get a 25% boost in potency

Tainted Persona Skill List:
Skill 1: Shuffle Time +1
Skill 2: Debilitating Spike
Skill 3: Auto-Tarukaja
Skill 4: Mediarama
Skill 5: Materadyne
Skill 6: [Locked]
Skill 7: [Locked]
Skill 8: [Locked]


Tainted Soul:

Possessed Form Name: Transcendent Golem Adam Kadmon, Paradise Maker
Persona Name: Avicebron
Possessed Form Appearance:

Spoiler:

Description: Floating behind Taiki, Avicebron commands the soil under him to raise, combining with his flesh to form a gigantic, five meter tall Golem, ripe with the power of the Sephiroth. Wherever this golem threads life flourishes in matter of seconds, only to wilt away just as fast when it leaves.


Human Skill Name: Breath of Life
Persona Name: Avicebron
Tier: Tier 1
Cost: 10 SP.
Type of Damage: [Self Explanatory]
Description: Avicebron creates a golem ally from soil. This Golem has stats (including HP) equal to 1/4 of Taiki's stats. Its attacks deal T1 Earth damage based off their PMstr and have a 10% chance to lower the foe's defense by -15% for three turns. Only one golem may be created at Tier 1. The golems created by Avicebron are automatically subject to buffs and debuffs affecting Taiki. The same is true for mental ailments, since golems do not have a mind of their own and are directly controlled by Avicebron.

Golems do not possess any elemental resistances or weaknesses, but they may be downed by a critical attack. Golems do not possess any skills and may only Guard or perform a basic attack.

Interesting idea for a Human Skill. I just have a few things to mention. The defense drop at Tier 1 would only be by 15%. Since the skill is Tier 1 only the effects of it at Tier 1 are necessary until you upgrade it. At Tier 1 you could do something like this, but not at half health. 1/4 potentially. Or you could let it survive three hits or last three turns. When your Tier goes up you can choose to multiply your number or increase the damage of the single golem, it'd be up to you. From then on you need to go into detail about what the golem has (are they strong or weak to anything, can they be downed, etc.) in order to make sure the golem is not without rules. Depending on what it has the cost may need to rise if need be, but just go back and flesh it out a bit more. Everything else is fine.

Done I think.

Honestly the skill is starting to do a little too much. Since it's at Tier 1, all the stats it gets should be 1/4 of your own, not just the HP. Giving them immunity to mental ailments is way too much for a Tier 1 skill. If they are subject to your buffs/debuffs then they need to be subject to ailments as well. Not to mention that if they don't have a mind, then they also should not have the ability to guard. Iron out the details of the golem, cause it can work as a Tier 1 ally, but since it's Tier 1 it isn't going to have 'that' many boons.

Keep in mind that Tier 1 are basic utilities. I can easily see you summoning a golem with 1/4 stats and only able to attack with Tier 1 Earth skills and a small spike chance. Certain things like the buffs/debuffs hitting you both make it even out a little more, but other things make it too strong.

Hmmm, problem is that if it has reduced PPend and PMend it'll be too frail. It having a fourth of Taiki's life already means it can only take one fourth as much punishment. Lowering its stats to a fourth of Taiki's would exponentially increase the damage it takes to the point it can't take a hit without dying.

Still, I see where you are coming from. It having the same stats as Taiki means it'd deal too much damage for a T1 skill. That's why I propose raising its health to 1/2 and reducing its stats to 1/2 of Taiki's. That should do the trick in keeping the damage dealt from being too high while keeping it resilient enough to be useful.

I'll remove the mental ailments thing and add a weakness, in case you think its still too good. I also raised the cost of the skill slightly.

The added on qualities for as the skill ranks up is unnecessary, since undoubtedly the wording will change when you do upgrade it. Leave that out until you upgrade it since the upgraded skill needs to be approved as well. Tier 1 isn't the most reliable so no; you cannot get more than 1/4 for your stats period. As you upgrade it you can choose the path of either upping the golem's stats to 1/2 of yours at Tier 2, or choose the path to make multiple. You're already getting a golem that can fight for you until it perishes. The fact that it can't crit is irrelevant since it can only use Tier 1 earth skills that can't crit by default and Guard. In all fairness the golem should have a cooldown but since it is connected to you by buffs and mental ailments it can slide.

Done.

Approved.