Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict.

Subject: Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict. Sun Jun 07, 2015 4:17 pm

Tremora Veritain
Love & Peace!

The Biography

Birth Name: Tremora Veritain
Aliases: The Stampede/Humanoid Typhoon
Gender: Male
Age: 22
Birth Day: April 2
Arcana: Strength
Evoker:

Evoker:

Place of Residence: San Malarus.... for now.
School Year: NA
Class: NA
After School Club: NA

Part Time Job: Adoption Center Caretaker

Appearance:

Tremora's Appearence:

A man with long upward yellow hair with a set of small sunglasses constantly wearing a red coat of sorts. His height is about 5 feet 7 inches with a slim build at 145 lbs. His left arm is also synthetic. He has blue eyes and a pointed chin.
Personality: A man with his entire life set on redemption and saving people. A very friendly guy with an extremely happy-go-lucky attitude. Able to be serious when demanded and an amazing and loyal friend. Sadly he hits on anyone he finds attractive, specifically those who look similar to his dead beloved.

The Potential

Strengths:

—Strength Name: Local Helper/Redeemer
—Description: Is willing to find redemption in everyone and helps everyone. All Healing skills are boosted by 10%

—Strength Name: Quick
—Description: His physical speed is so quick that he can dodge point blank gunfire. He can also out maneuver almost anyone. 5% boost to luck.

—Strength Name: Genius
—Description:He has for many years evaded the police for his assumed killing of his beloved and can get out of any bad situation without killing a single person. A very quick thinker and able to foil any plan that would harm anyone. This allows him to save enough energy to effectively hit an enemy, and hit it once more, allowing him two hits with a soul-bound weapon in a combat post.

—Strength Name: Trusting
—Description: When something important must be done he is willing to trust others to get them done, when he is unable to do so. He is also very willing to open up to people on many things.

—Strength Name: Cool Headed Goofball
—Description: Even though he may look like a total goofball he is extremely calm and collected, with this façade/part of him almost constantly being put out. This makes him very endearing to children. It also helps him have the perfect deceit against anyone too serious.

Weaknesses:

—Weakness Name: Trusting
—Description: His trust is given to almost everyone he meets and it has been known to cause him many problems. Can easily obtain evidence sufficient to be blackmailed or anything similar. Also makes him bad about keeping secrets, giving him a constant chance of blurting out things that must be hidden to people he knows (People of social rank 4 and above).

—Weakness Name: Unwilling to Kill
—Description:He has swore to never kill again and save everyone, giving those with no hope of redemption the perfect chance to strike. -30% Penalty to Persona damage in PvP (-15% in PvS). Why only persona? Because he never kills anyone or lets anyone die, which would be a lot harder with a persona.

—Weakness Name: Convicted Felon
—Description:Even though he is an amazingly nice person he is often the subject of rough treatment by those with the mentality that no matter what he is still a killer. May even include being attacked by these people.

—Weakness Name: Blatantly Obvious
—Description: You can see him 6 months ago and remember him vividly, even if you were just passing by him. He also isn't that good at hiding. Sneaking of any kind is almost not an option to him.

—Weakness Name: Constant Lady Hunter
—Description: He often is very obnoxious to those who remind him of his beloved making him a general nuisance and a hinderence to them. Easier for girls to dislike him. -25% penalty to Persona and Character damage against Females.... including those who look like females (Includes feminine shadows, males, and otherworldly beings.)

Soul Bound Weapon:

Weapon Name: Katana
Weapon Description: A masterpiece katana..... for some reason identical to one made by it's famous creator, Masamune. It is 1.2 kg with a length of 67 cm. It is a curved, slender, single-edged sword with a circular guard
Weapon Image:

Katana:

Weapon Attack Type: Slash
Weapon Element:

The Background

History: Tremora used to have a house in San Malarus Island with a girlfriend and a good job. Unfortunately in recent times their was a strain on his relationship with her, mainly on her side, and that's when Tremora completely lost his cool and stabbed her. The cops were called by a neighbor who heard the scuffle and arrived to see a grieving Tremora who immediately regretted murdering her, but he couldn't bear to go to jail just yet so he ran. He evaded the police for 2 straight years even when he was seen in broad daylight in obvious attire, and in all the confrontations with him there were no serious injuries and no fatalities. Finally, on his very own birthday he turned himself in to the police.

The police were cheering that they caught a murderer until they heard what Tremora had done while evading them. Many people were protesting against the police saying that they have the wrong person due to Tremora constantly helping anyone who needed help. This also explained the very few reports about his whereabouts while constantly being in open view. With all of these kind acts while he was being chased by the police along with his obvious efforts to put injuries of any kind to a minimum and absolutely no fatalities, the court decided to do a lighter sentence on him, prison for 20 years with community service. He used to live in the second floor of the Azores Prison while routinely being sent out for community service. However, due to constant good behavior for 2 years the courts decided to let him be autonomous in his helping and able to live in the city again in exchange for a tracker being put inside him and having surveillance on him 24/7.

He is known to the local community as a redemptionist and local good guy. When helping people he even arrested some petty criminals, giving him a good standing with the police and most of the community. All of this is for redemption of his wrongdoing, killing his loved one.

Subject: Re: Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict. Tue Jun 09, 2015 3:41 pm

I believe that I have finished this so I would appreciate it if any of you would check my character and I really hope you will let me have my very involved Strengths and Weaknesses, and if not I'll just have them be character descriptions. Everything else I believe is completely in order so I hope you approve me!

Posts : 6498 Join date : 2013-07-06 Age : 29

Hello. Just gonna give some advice so you know:

Social links are judged based on how well you connect, rather than a percent chance. When a thread is completed it is sent in to be graded. Another issue is that it would be fairly hard to argue what a "serious" Arcana is, so that strength doesn't exactly apply so much. Also, normal luck strengths boost your luck by 5%, so if you take two your luck boost would have a total of 10% unless you balanced it well enough in the weaknesses.

All info about strengths/weaknesses can be found here if you need ideas or help:
https://newarcana.forumotion.com/t340-the-strengths-and-weaknesses-faq

That fourth weakness has no number application so you don't have to handicap yourself, you can just say he is terrible at sneaking. Finally, I just need the weight of your character specifically and the length of your soulbound weapon and after that you should be approved. Be sure to look over your strengths/weaknesses once more. If you have questions, ask me or Sharaku.

Subject: Re: Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict. Wed Jun 10, 2015 8:51 pm

I believe that I have changed everything you wanted changed to what is proper, pls look over it to make sure I didn't mess up. Also, he is INTENTIONALLY weak against players, and the fact of shadows being a part of someone makes it harder for him to hit with full force. He is built more for crits, agility, and supporting so pls count that in.

Posts : 6498 Join date : 2013-07-06 Age : 29

Be specific on what you mean by support skills cause Dia and Tarukaja are two different types of skills, one being recovery and the other being enhance (There is a list of skills you can look at for reference), and you can have a cost reduction or a performance boost, but only for a single type or if you have a weakness that has two penalties in one or it balances, since getting a boost in healing skills AND getting a cost reduction on other skills is a rather huge boost. Since you are putting a humongous handicap on yourself, make sure your strengths are cleared up so you won't be confused.

Posts : 6498 Join date : 2013-07-06 Age : 29

Approved.

Subject: Re: Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict. Wed Jan 27, 2016 9:32 pm

Tremora Veritain
Love & Peace!

The Biography

Birth Name: Tremora Veritain
Aliases: The Stampede/Humanoid Typhoon
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Birth Day: April 2
Arcana: Strength
Evoker:

Evoker:

Place of Residence: San Malarus
School Year: NA
Class: NA
After School Club: NA

Part Time Job: Adoption Center Caretaker

Appearance:

Tremora's Appearence:

A man with long upward yellow hair with a set of small sunglasses constantly wearing a red coat of sorts. His height is about 5 feet 7 inches with a slim build at 145 lbs. His left arm is also synthetic. He has blue eyes and a pointed chin.
Personality: A man with his entire life set on redemption and saving people. A very friendly guy with an extremely happy-go-lucky attitude. Able to be serious when demanded and an amazing and loyal friend. Sadly he hits on anyone he finds attractive, specifically those who look similar to his dead beloved.

The Potential

Strengths:

—Strength Name: Local Helper/Redeemer
—Description: Is willing to find redemption in everyone and helps everyone. SP cost for tactical skills reduces by 10%

—Strength Name: Quick
—Description: His physical speed is so quick that he can dodge point blank gunfire. He can also out maneuver almost anyone. 15% boost to luck.

—Strength Name: Genius
—Description:He has for many years evaded the police for his assumed killing of his beloved and can get out of any bad situation without killing a single person. A very quick thinker and able to foil any plan that would harm anyone. This allows him to save enough energy to effectively hit an enemy, and hit it once more, allowing him two hits with a soul-bound weapon in a combat post.

—Strength Name: Trusting
—Description: When something important must be done he is willing to trust others to get them done, when he is unable to do so. He is also very willing to open up to people on many things.

—Strength Name: Cool Headed Goofball
—Description: Even though he may look like a total goofball he is extremely calm and collected, with this façade/part of him almost constantly being put out. This makes him very endearing to children. It also helps him have the perfect deceit against anyone too serious.

Weaknesses:

—Weakness Name: Trusting
—Description: His trust is given to almost everyone he meets and it has been known to cause him many problems. Can easily obtain evidence sufficient to be blackmailed or anything similar. Also makes him bad about keeping secrets, giving him a constant chance of blurting out things that must be hidden to people he knows (People of social rank 4 and above).

—Weakness Name: Unwilling to Kill
—Description:He has swore to never kill again and save everyone, giving those with no hope of redemption the perfect chance to strike. Tremora will hold back a killing/knockout blow once on a character / plot important person.

—Weakness Name: Stabby PTSD
—Description: Getting knocked out and almost dying is not fun, especially if it is from something pointy. With this Tremora has gained a fear of pointy objects, such as needles and spears and such. 10% chance to panic when hit by a pierce attack.

—Weakness Name: Blatantly Obvious
—Description: You can see him 6 months ago and remember him vividly, even if you were just passing by him. He also isn't that good at hiding. Sneaking of any kind is almost not an option to him. This oddly reduces his MEnd by 6%

—Weakness Name: Constant Lady Hunter
—Description: He often is very obnoxious to those who remind him of his beloved making him a general nuisance and a hinderence to them. Easier for girls to dislike him. -25% penalty to Persona damage against Females.

Soul Bound Weapon:

Weapon Name: Katana
Weapon Description: A masterpiece katana..... for some reason identical to one made by it's famous creator, Masamune. It is 1.2 kg with a length of 67 cm. It is a curved, slender, single-edged sword with a circular guard
Weapon Image:

Katana:

Weapon Attack Type: Slash
Weapon Element:

The Background

History: Tremora used to have a house in San Malarus Island with a girlfriend and a good job. Unfortunately in recent times their was a strain on his relationship with her, mainly on her side, and that's when Tremora completely lost his cool and stabbed her. The cops were called by a neighbor who heard the scuffle and arrived to see a grieving Tremora who immediately regretted murdering her, but he couldn't bear to go to jail just yet so he ran. He evaded the police for 2 straight years even when he was seen in broad daylight in obvious attire, and in all the confrontations with him there were no serious injuries and no fatalities. Finally, on his very own birthday he turned himself in to the police.

The police were cheering that they caught a murderer until they heard what Tremora had done while evading them. Many people were protesting against the police saying that they have the wrong person due to Tremora constantly helping anyone who needed help. This also explained the very few reports about his whereabouts while constantly being in open view. With all of these kind acts while he was being chased by the police along with his obvious efforts to put injuries of any kind to a minimum and absolutely no fatalities, the court decided to do a lighter sentence on him, prison for 20 years with community service. He used to live in the second floor of the Azores Prison while routinely being sent out for community service. However, due to constant good behavior for 2 years the courts decided to let him be autonomous in his helping and able to live in the city again in exchange for a tracker being put inside him and having surveillance on him 24/7.

He is known to the local community as a redemptionist and local good guy. When helping people he even arrested some petty criminals, giving him a good standing with the police and most of the community. All of this is for redemption of his wrongdoing, killing his loved one.

After the Events in the Azores 2 years ago he has honed his skills to a fine edge, and has maintained his relations with those he met in the process of ending the threat. His best friend is Nozomi Kichida, who he views as a good person and friend. Although he doesn't know it, Tremora has been accidentally preparing for another event to happen in the Azores.

Edited Tremora Veritain for Azores II

Posts : 6498 Join date : 2013-07-06 Age : 29

No reduction of support skills that high without a decent weakness. Certain weaknesses like the Stab wound don't make sense cause wounds from a Shadow affect the soul not the body. For the Unwilling to Kill, you cannot control your damage so you can't have them suddenly endure one of your attacks unless they had the Endure skill. Also the 25% less Persona damage seems fine but how do you equate character damage to a percent since that affects the real body? The agility strength needs some kind of penalty to match. Be sure to fix this and everything else should be fine.

Subject: Re: Tremora Veritain, the autonomous convict. Wed Jan 27, 2016 10:06 pm

(Probably) Edited to Gran-Mama's specifications.

Posts : 6498 Join date : 2013-07-06 Age : 29

Support skills refer to tactical skills. So anything in the tactical section applies. Since I remember you had healing abilities, and the strength will not apply to it. That being said, because you have such hefty penalties the reduction by 10% is fine. Just remember what it does and doesn't count for. Approved.

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