Henry's Initial Persona: Macabre! (Ready to be graded)

Persona Name: Macabre

Persona Type: Tainted Persona

Persona's Arcana: Death

Owner: Henry Mortimier

Persona Appearance: http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/megamitensei/images/6/62/Macabre.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20100527162743

Macabre is a semi humanoid being wearing a white-skintight mask with a red mark on it in a black jester outfit with a white skull on the chest of the outfit holding a scythe.

Persona Background: A work of art with grim or ghastly atmosphere. Macabre works of art or fiction tend to emphasize the details and symbols of death. Danse Macabre or the "Dance of Death" works of art tend to depict the dead or Death itself summoning representatives from all walks of life to dance along to the grave. They were created to remind people of the fragility of their lives and how vain the glories of earthly life are. It is believed to originate from illustrated sermon texts.

Strengths: Dark.

Weaknesses: Light.
Passive Boosts: Users have a latent 15% boost in dark-based skills.

Tainted Persona Skill List: ((Skill List can be found here. Your skills grow in order, meaning you must unlock Skill 4 to get to Skill 5 and so on.))

Skill 1: Mamudo (Must be a Tier 1 Skill)
Skill 2: Mudo (Must be a Tier 1 Skill)
Skill 3: Wide Sweep (Must be a Tier 2 Skill or lower)
Skill 4: Mudo Boost. (Unlocked once using your Tainted Persona 25 times in PvS combat; Must be Tier 2 Skill or Lower)
Skill 5: Die For Me! (Unlocked once winning atleast 10 PvS battles and using your Persona an additional 30 times in PvS combat; Must be a Tier 3 Skill or Lower)
Skill 6: Deathbound (Unlocked once using your Tainted Persona an additional 35 times in PvS combat or capturing a Psyche Terrorist above your level; Must be a Tier 3 Skill or Lower)
Skill 7: Arms Master (Unlocked once completing a mission posted solely for cadets and using your Persona an additional 45 times in PvS combat; Must be a Tier 4 Skill or Lower)
Skill 8: Null Light (Unlocked after defeating one of the NPC Velvet Attendants in combat or using your Persona an additional 45 times in PvS combat; Must be a Tier 4 Skill or Lower)


Tainted Soul: (The Ultimate fusion between you and your Tainted Persona. When using this, your Persona fuses within your soul, corrupting it and transforming you into a higher being temporarily. Once this is done, you take on a more otherworldy appearance thanks to being possessed by your Tainted Persona, but your stats are all doubled. This form lasts for three turns, and once it is over you revert back to your original form and all your stats are reverted to 1 till the end of the topic or you use an item/skill to recover. This can only be used once per topic and once being used, your Tainted Persona can no longer be used within the same topic.)

Possessed Form Name: Macabre MAX
Persona Name: Macabre
Possessed Form Appearance: The closest way to describe it would be this: http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/bionicle/images/a/a4/Irnakk.PNG/revision/latest?cb=20100118154657 except in pure black, and one hand (now a giant claw) holding a truly terrifying scythe (his soul bound), now mutated into a claw, and his gun, Ruin, attached to the other. It also sprouts 6 black-feathered wings, and gains and overall demonic asset. It also gains a truly terrifying smile that never leaves it's face.
Truly the stuff of death of nightmares.

Description: Henry and Macabre become one, as Henry plays the first 12 notes of the Danse Macabre, he becomes enveloped in a blood red cloud that has a black aura emanating from it, as Henry laughs, the laugh getting louder and louder as he transforms. When it is complete, Henry becomes completely bloodthirsty, not ceasing until all it's enemies are destroyed, or it itself is dead (he can't run either, but, eh, if he has to do this, there's no point in running... every single enemy at this point is on a one way ticket to the afterlife). Henry also becomes extremely psychopathic and sadistic as well, and this is reflected in his attacks, his magic now having screams coming from it, and his scythe glowing with an unearthly black flame every time he swings it. When he fires his gun, it's shots also become the sounds of the screams of the departed. He can willingly activate it at any time during battle.

Soul Skill Name: Danse Macabre (ver.1)
Persona Name: Macabre
Tier: Tier 1
Cost: 8% HP
Type of Damage: Phys. (Slash)
Description: Henry and Macabre each slash an opponent once, dealing light slash damage twice.

Alrighty, for starters you have a Tainted skillset but it says your Persona is an Initial Persona....so which is it?

You also can't add any secondary effects to Tainted Soul unless it was a strength on your sheet.

As for your Soul Skill, that is doing too much for Tier 1. You can either have a dual hit physical attack, a dark attack, a minor instant kill, or a dark attack with a weak instant kill chance. It won't be dual element either until Tier 2.

Approved.